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Post by melluka on Dec 17, 2007 16:38:55 GMT
Hi! so... I'm going to continue my fanfic here, and I'm changing some little stuff... I'm re-doing the whole thing so it might take a little while... love you, thanks 4 your support Lozza! Love...
Me
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Post by melluka on Dec 17, 2007 16:39:32 GMT
Hey y'all! So, here I am. back. posting again and finishing my fanfic. It's the same story, but I'm just making it longer and more detailed this time, and there are some little stuff I changed. You'll see. Well, I really, really hope you liked it the first time and continue to like it. Goes on! Remember the summary: everything happened just like in the show, but Marissa's not dead. You'll see. ---- Chapter 1: The Graduates, once again. ---- This couldn't be happening. It was their graduation! it was supposed to be awesome. He had a new car, a school diploma, Marissa...Wait, no. He didn't have her. Not anymore. And it was true to say his life didn't work out without her. It didn't. Of course, he'd had other girls and fooled around a lot. But none of them was or could ever be like Her. He missed her like hell, and this was going to be his opportunity to make things up with her... He moaned as he tried to pull her out of the car. He lifted her and carried her in his arms. At one point he wasn't able to walk anymore, and his knees collapsed. He looked at her, lying in his arms, totally helpless. "Hold on" he whispered. "I'm gonna go get help"
"No, Ryan..." she managed to say "Stay..."
"Ok, ok...hold on..." he slowly caressed her forehead and hair. He felt his heartbeat pace lowering and freaked out. "No...don't leave me...I...I love you"
Marissa pulled out a smile.
"Thank you Ryan...I...I love you too"....
"Hold on..." he took out his cellphone and dialed 911. he quickly told them about their location and what had happened.
"The ambulance is on its way" he told her. "Ok, ok...hold on..." he slowly caressed her forehead and hair. He felt his heartbeat pace lowering and freaked out. "No...don't leave me...I...I love you" Marissa pulled out a smile. "Thank you Ryan...I...I love you too"....
He smiled. This gave Ryan a quick idea.
"Remember...when we first met??"
She smiled, too.
"Who a...are youu?"
"Whoever you want me to be"
He kept like that, telling her all of their prettiest adventures, encouraging her to talk, until after what Ryan felt had been an hour, the ambulance arrived.
"We're taking her, Mr." the paramedic told Ryan and took her out of his arms. Ryan felt suddenly incomplete, but he was sure they would take good care of her. And, before he could make any other statement, he fainted.
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Post by Claire =) on Dec 17, 2007 23:06:39 GMT
Wow thats good cant wait to read more
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Post by Care Bear on Dec 17, 2007 23:18:27 GMT
good scene hun thanx...i think i m going to invent the time machine than return the moment they were filming this scene and Ryna&Marissa ll be married now
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Post by mischaobsessed on Dec 18, 2007 0:51:33 GMT
MELI! yay you joined! hunny its amazing!!!! Man i wished it finished like that! soo good hun! cant wait for the next chapter! and thanks for mentioning me in your opening! BMLP! love it & you heaps!!
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Post by ziggystardust on Dec 18, 2007 8:22:37 GMT
aw this scene was soo sad excited for the next chapter!
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Post by melluka on Dec 18, 2007 23:05:33 GMT
Yaaaa!!!!!! thanks so much for repliying. Haha it's my pleasure Lozza! you were one of the few people supporting my fanfic on the last forum and I owe it all to u! I'm finishing the next chapter now. haha. love u all!
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Post by melluka on Dec 18, 2007 23:23:11 GMT
Ohhh yeah Lozza!!! the BMLP! We outta finish it and do more! God I love them so much
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Post by mischaobsessed on Dec 19, 2007 1:38:51 GMT
Naww thankyou very much hun! you were my inspiration too! i just finished two chapters so you can go and read them too! love you heaps cant wait until the next addition!
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Post by melluka on Dec 20, 2007 0:47:41 GMT
--- Chapter 2: The Lost and Found ---- Ryan woke up in the hospital. He looked at his side and found Seth sitting on a chair beside him. He had fallen asleep. "Seth?" Ryan said in a low voice. "Don't eat my pudding!!" Seth woke up violently from his dream. He rubbed his eyes and saw Ryan. "Ryan, man! you're up! That, is, great" Seth said relieved. "Mom and Dad went out for dinner. They're really worried about you". He smiled. "How is she?" Ryan blurted out, knowing he wouldn't be able to rest if he didn't know she was OK. Seth's smiled vanished. "See, Ryan...the doctors tried their best and..." Ryan's heart broke into thousands of pieces. Did she leave him? Was she ok? Did she survive? Were all of Ryan's efforts just for nothing? "Seth is she alive?" he screamed. Seth slowly nodded. "It was really hard to keep her alive, but she is. She is, but she's on intensive care. If you hadn't called, Ryan...who knows what could've happened." Ryan sighed, relieved, and lied on his pillow. She was alive. She was OK. He had been able to save her. He wouldn't have forgiven himself if he hadn' been able to save her. He needed her. If he hadn't been able to save her, his life would've been destroyed. But she was OK. He was ok. "How long have I been here?" "Um...almost 2 days now, I'd say" Seth replied. "I better go phone mom and dad and tell them to bring me some food from the restaurant...I'm hungry. I'll tell them you are alright. They were really worried". And he left the room. After a few minutes of total loneliness, he started missing Her. "Maybe I should go visit her" Ryan thought. But then he remembered what Seth had said: she was in intensive care, which meant she probably couldn't get any visits. So he just laid his head down, and started building his GP: game plan. Being so close to losing her made him realize he was nothing without her. He lived and had always -since the day he met her- lived for her. But he was the one who let her go in the first place. He was the one who agreed on breaking up when both their hearts were greaving to be with each other. The one who forgot to take care of her when she was with Volchok. The one who practically abandoned her. He wanted with all his heart to get back with her. All Ryan wanted to do was hold her, protect her and never let her go. Even if this time it meant to sacrifice himself for her well-being, he would. "What are you doing, Ryan?" Seth got in the room. "GPing" Ryan mumbled.
"You want to get back with Marissa, don't you?" Seth nodded.
"How do you know?" Ryan frowned.
"Man, I know you!" Seth exclaimed, excited. "Everytime something bad happens to Marissa, you want to get back with her. It's a good idea, it is. And I think you've gotten a GP".
"I haven't gotten my Game Plan yet"
"I meant a good point".
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haha so this was the 2nd chapter. hope you liked it, and thanks for all of the pretty reviews! loveee you alll!!!!
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Post by melluka on Dec 20, 2007 0:57:05 GMT
Wow Lozza I just realized you put the definition of Mischa I gave you under your avatar! haha! Glad it was helpful.
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Post by mischaobsessed on Dec 20, 2007 4:15:26 GMT
Wow Lozza I just realized you put the definition of Mischa I gave you under your avatar! haha! Glad it was helpful. WOOOW THAT CHAPTER WAS... AMAZING!you had me going for a second, i thought you really were going to kill marissa, but i know you too well meli! lol and thankyou for the meaning of mischa hun!!
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Post by Mischaholic on Dec 20, 2007 5:21:15 GMT
That was awesome!!!
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Post by melluka on Dec 21, 2007 1:46:54 GMT
Thanks for all the replies! Im really glad youre liking it!
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Post by melluka on Dec 26, 2007 3:06:06 GMT
--- Chapter 3: The Promise --- (A month later.) Ryan was sent home three days later. Marissa had to stay in the hospital 2 weeks longer than him, but after that she was sent home to rest a lot. (Julie and Dr. Roberts are still married so Marissa and Summer live together). Ryan & Seth went to visit her every afternoon. "Hi, how are you doing?" Ryan said entering Marissa's room with Seth, who waved at her.
"Hey guys" she smiled back at Ryan "I'm doing really good, thanks."
They stood there, staring and getting lost in each other's eyes. Seth cleared his throat.
"I'm---gonna go check on Summer" he mumbled.
Ryan sat next to her on the edge of the bed. Marissa closed her eyes and rested her head in her pillow. Ryan just couldn't help but stare at her stunning beauty. He started caressing her cheek, then the rest of her face until he reached her lips. Then, he couldn't help himself anymore: he leaned forward and kissed her softly. The thing is, Marissa started kissing him back.
"I...I'm sorry" Ryan blurted out breaking the kiss. "I shouldn't have done that. I'm sure the last thing you want now is to date me..."
"Oh, Ryan" Marissa laughed and pulled him back into kissing her. Later she broke apart. "I love you, Ryan" she said looking into his eyes.
"Really?" Ryan smiled. "I mean...I love you too" Ryan responded softly. He kissed her forehead and sat beside her.
"I never had the chance to thank you for saving me..." after a few seconds, Marissa looked at him with tears in her eyes.
"It's alright...." Ryan started, but Marissa kept talking.
"No, it isn't. It's all my fault, Ryan. I shouldn't have broken up with you in the first place...or dated Kevin...it would've saved us a lot of pain and suffering...I want to make that up to you..." she started crying silently.
"Hey" Ryan looked her straight in the eyes and caressed her cheek. "You're here. I love you. And that's all that matters".
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